Barley Literate: Evensong

Thursday, October 1, 2015

My haiku, “Evensong,” appeared in cattails, published by the United Haiku and Tanka Society, read it online here.

This is the published version:

one owl’s call
quickens my longing to sing—
my one note

Earlier, I wrote this version in the more familiar 5-7-5 syllable structure:

The owl, that one call,

quickens my longing to sing

only one note, mine.

I’m satisfied with both. I prefer the original version.

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